HW2: Rewrite
Gene’s final paragraph.
Gene’s version:
As the tables show, in non-profit hospitals the effect was
relativey minor, whereas in for-profit contexts cost increases were
considerable. In the latter case, the reduced co-payments apparently gave rise
to a noticeable increase in the number of tests ordered by the physicians.
These findings support other studies which show that cost containment may prove
very difficult in a “free market” medical economy.
As the tables show, non-profit hospitals had less effect than
for-profit contexts did. In the latter case, the physicians ordered a number of
tests were striking causes of the increase of the reduced co-payments.
Moreover, high payments were absolutely required for those received in an emergency department. These findings support other studies which indicate that
cost containment may not so easy to prove in a “free market” medical economy.
( Rewrited ) ^ rewritten [Sp,Gr] version:
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rewritten version:
DeleteAs the tables show, non-profit hospitals saw smaller increases than for-profit contexts did. In the latter case, the physicians ordered a strikingly higher number of tests which the data strongly suggest were caused by a reduction in co-payments. Moreover, high payments were required of those received in emergency rooms. The data need to take into account such factors as the total numb of patients, patients' income, age, and level of satisfaction, nevertheless, these findings support other studies which indicate that cost containment may not prove so easy in a “free market” medical economy.