Task Three
What
advice would you give Gene?
I
would like to give you my advice that you should mention about the data and
also the problems from it. The variation factors such as: the amount of
patient, the patient income, age, and level of satisfaction, effect to not only
the decreasing co-payments, but also the rising number of tests ordered by
physicians.
Write
down your suggestions in note form. Then edit or rewrite his final paragraph to
reflect your advice.
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Note form
The health care costs of non-profit
and for profit hospitals in the United States.
o
Data
§ non-profit : costs increased by 4.8%
§ for-profit : costs increased by 24.7%
o
Cause
§ The tests ordered by physicians
§ The variation factors : the amount
of patient, the patient income, age,
and level of satisfaction
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The new conclusion
As the tables, shows that in non-profit
hospitals, costs increased by 4.8%, while in for-profit hospitals
increases around 24.7%. The cause of this difference is the amount of the tests
ordered by physicians at the same time of the decreasing co-payments. Not only because
of the rising number of tests ordered by physicians but also the variation factors
such as: the amount of patient, the patient income, age, and level of satisfaction,
effected to the decreasing co-payments. The supporter of these findings is from
the other studies that shown the cost containment may prove very difficult in “Free
market” medical economy.
Task Three
ReplyDeleteWhat advice would you give Gene?
* (I would like to give you my advice that you should) ^ I would like to advise you to mention ( about ) the data ^ regarding rising healthcare costs and also the problems ( from it ) ^ that arise from them. (The variation ) ^ Various factors such as ( : the ( amount ) ^ number of ( patient ) ^ patients, ^ and) the ( patient ) ^ patient's income, age, and level of satisfaction, ( effect to ) ^ affect not only the decreasing co-payments, but also the rising number of tests ordered by physicians.
* Amy, note that this was a rhetorical question. It's often the case in English academic textbooks that the authors/editors will address the reader vocatively (and rather informally) as "you," and offer the reader the chance to hypothetically confer with the characters in the example. It is not common that the student must actually use direct address unless directly so commanded, as in "Tell Gene exactly how you would help him. In short, you must simply write your own version of his text.
The word that can be used as a function word to introduce a subordinate clause that is joined as complement to a noun or adjective (we are certain that this is true) (the fact that you are here). For that reason, your grammar is not theoretically wrong. No grammatical rule is being violated. However, English idiom and collocation dictates that that, in combination with advice, should follow that latter word's verbal form (advise), and that should instead be used as a function word to introduce a noun clause that is the subject or object of a verb or a predicate nominative and would need to have an indirect object (I want to advise you that your room will be unavailable until tomorrow.) Note that the noun clause following that will always have a subject. In this case, it is unadvisable to write I would like to advise you that you should, when you can simply write I would like to advise you to.